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Morganstern looked up at Jon's taut-muscled body as Jon started his first thrust-but with less than an inch inside, the lusty young writer stopped and held himself perfectly still. "What's the matter?" Morganstern asked. "Short fuze, real short," Jon said. "Afraid I'll shoot too soon." "May I make a few suggestions?" asked Morganstern. "Sure," said Jon, easing himself in another inch deeper. "Suggest away." "Instead of putting your reply in the >>same way you did in the first paragraph of this story, start a new paragraph with >>every "Uh - why?" Morganstern said, "It makes it lots easier for the reader to tell who's saying what. Like-in that first paragraph, the reader's not quite sure who said, 'Afraid I'll shoot too soon.' Also, it makes for short paragraphs, which are easier to read than screens or pages filled with uninterrupted type. Indenting every paragraph also makes the story easier to read. And since that's the way almost all printed fiction is done, it's what the reader expects-and you don't want to distract the reader from what we're doing Right Now. If you're preparing a story for the internet, put a blank line between paragraphs, limit line length to about 65 or 70 characters, and indent each paragraph five spaces instead of using the 'tab' key." Morganstern felt Jon slide another inch deeper. He met Jon's next thrust with a wiggle and a squirm, then felt Jon push harder. "Okay; what else?" asked Jon. "When you ask a question in dialog, put the question mark or exclamation point >>inside "Oh." Jon took a deep breath, went in another inch. "And * did you say you had more suggestions?" he asked. "Yup. When you have a bit of dialog that >>doesn't mark or exclamation point, and >>is 'he replied'-then use a comma -- >>inside said Morganstern. "Use a period-inside the quote marks-only when you don't have a 'he said'-or 'asked' or the like following the quote marks." Jon said, as he cautiously began another thrust, "Oh. I think I understand." "Three more things: Don't feel that you have to reach for substitutes for 'said' in speech tags-using 'observed' or 'expounded' or 'intoned' is far more distracting than the simple 'he said' With questions, use 'he asked.' Use 'whispered' or 'growled' >>very reader additional information that the context doesn't already make clear. Otherwise, all those substitutes will distract the reader from the Main Event. The verb in a speech tag has to be something that makes sense: you can't 'smirk' a sentence; you can't hiss, 'Take that!' " "And the other two things?" Jon asked. He was breathing harder now, and going deeper with every stroke. "One way to break up the monotony of 'he said' 'he said' 'he said' is to leave off the speech tag entirely-but only when it's perfectly obvious who's speaking. With just the two of us, and you asking questions and me answering them, we leave out 'Jon said' and 'Morganstern said go for several paragraphs without confusing the reader. With ordinary conversation and only two speakers, it's best to identify a speaker every third paragraph. And always make it clear which 'he' you mean. "And if one of us talks for more than one paragraph at a time-as I'm doing right now-leave off the end-of-paragraph quote marks until the >>last paragraph of that speech," Morganstern said as he tightened his legs around Jon's waist, locking their naked bodies together. "You still need opening quotes at the >>start this one. "The other way to break up that monotony-and remember that the reader isn't really going to notice that monotony so long as it's an interesting >>story tighten, felt him go in hilt-deep with each thrust. "In the same paragraph with a within-quotes speech, step out of the quoted part and put in something-like my getting turned on by feeling that you're getting close-and which advances the plot at the same time that the writer establishes who is saying what is inside of the quote marks." "Yeah? Hey! I noticed that when you interrupt the quoted part that way you end what's inside the quotes with a period, and start what follows the quote with a capital letter." Jon grinned. "Like this?" "Exactly." Morganstern felt Jon pump faster. "Just like this." "And I even noticed how you're using single quotes inside the double-quote marks without you telling me. But-how come you're using "s and "s, instead of the plain old " key?" "Either one's okay, but the " and " are easier for your readers to convert into the typesetting double-quotes. And if a reader is more comfortable with the " symbol, he can easily convert from the " and " to the " mark. Using the typesetting double-quotes codes-or anything else that's not on a standard keyboard-can be a real pain for readers whose equipment doesn't fit yours just right." "Well, I think this is a really >>weird lesson-but yeah, >>our Morganstern felt a grin spread across his own face. "Well, it kept you cooled down, didn't it? Instead of going off too soon, the way young dudes like you usually do when they're riding a big, hunky muscle-stud like me, you've been plowing me for-Hey! Slow down; you're almost there!" "Yeah-I-noticed," Jon thrust faster, harder, faster still. He suddenly gasped aloud, rammed himself all the way in, went rigid, and then slowly, slowly relaxed. "I was humping along okay, stretching it out just like you told me to, until you reminded me just what we're doing, and all of a sudden it was too late to stop." He panted for a moment, then said, "I bet you couldn't keep this lesson going with >>you "I can so! Where's my shirt? I always carry a few extra in my pocket, so I can put one on before we . . ." "Don't worry-I got a supply in my bureau. Let me see." Jon straightened his arms, looked down at their still-linked bodies, and said, "Yeah-as long and thick as you are, 'extra large' oughta fit just right."